I have to aggree with the other guy. You are on the right track with the people busters. I really liked that plot. I just think that you are missing a lot of things that are important to a Ghostbusters movie. What did you do with Genine and Dana. Where did they go. I also do not like the way that you got rid of Peter. When the Peoplebusters came he diden't even put up a fight. What is up with that. That is just not Peters style. About the four new ghostbusters. I do not like that. It does not seem right that there would be new Ghostbusters. And finally at the end when you had the main bad spirit be Peter. What was up with that. Why did he come in the form of Peter. It seems to me that you just kind of took the same kind of plot for GB 1 when they were told to pick their distructer. Other than that and a couple of spots where you leave a lot of holes it was really great. I am not trying to be an asshole but that is what I think. I could not have written a better script. Maby you chould get together with Dan and work on it a little.

“PETER
There are some things in this world that go way beyond human understanding. Things that cannot be explained. Things that some don't even want to know about! That is where we come in.
RAY and EGON nod

PROSECUTOR
So what you're saying is that the world of the supernatural is your exclusive province?

PETER
Kitten, I think that what I'm saying is that: sometimes, shit happens, someone has to deal with it, and who ya gonna call?”

might as well have just typed up the real ghostbusters episode about people busters, it had much more structure…
nick

In this script is has a pretty good plot line. But if you are going to make a movie script you have to have more dialogue then what you got. I am creating a novel called The Furture of the Ghostbusters: In a Fan's Eyes. IT is getting along great. IT is pretty good but llisten instead of them caputuring an elephant in the beginning it should be a group of evil clowns. That would be more cooler than an elephant. Other than less diagoue and the elephant part it is pretty cool. Anyway watch out for my novel and see you guys later. And also with all the orignal characters it isn't very realistic for a movie. They would have a whole new cast. Well anyway I must go see ya!

In this script is has a pretty good plot line. But if you are going to make a movie script you have to have more dialogue then what you got. I am creating a novel called The Furture of the Ghostbusters: In a Fan's Eyes. IT is getting along great. IT is pretty good but llisten instead of them caputuring an elephant in the beginning it should be a group of evil clowns. That would be more cooler than an elephant. Other than less diagoue and the elephant part it is pretty cool. Anyway watch out for my novel and see you guys later. And also with all the orignal characters it isn't very realistic for a movie. They would have a whole new cast. Well anyway I must go see ya!

In this script is has a pretty good plot line. But if you are going to make a movie script you have to have more dialogue then what you got. I am creating a novel called The Furture of the Ghostbusters: In a Fan's Eyes. IT is getting along great. IT is pretty good but llisten instead of them caputuring an elephant in the beginning it should be a group of evil clowns. That would be more cooler than an elephant. Other than less diagoue and the elephant part it is pretty cool. Anyway watch out for my novel and see you guys later. And also with all the orignal characters it isn't very realistic for a movie. They would have a whole new cast. Well anyway I must go see ya!

basic movie script rules:

3 acts:

inciting incident: what causes the movie to begin

act 1: setup, meet characters, give conflict - 30 minutes

act 2: playing out of conflict, its affects, and the character's eventual downfall - 60 minutes

act 3: the character comes out of his slump to save the day - 30 minutes

between act 1 and 2, and 2 and 3, there are “turning points,” major events which segway into the next act. to make things clearer:

ghostbusters:
inciting incident: the ghost in the library gets them thinking

act 1: they are kicked out the university, decide to go into business

tp act 1: the successfully bust slimer, and their career takes off

act 2: we get deep into Dana's story, etc. At the end, the Ghostbusters get sent to jail - their slump

tp act 2: they get out of jail

act 3: they save the day

watch the movies, they fit the time profile to a T. I wouldve done one for Ghostbusters 2, but it is nearly the exact same thing, which a couple minor words changed (the scorelli bros. instead of slimer).
just thought youd like to know.
nick

It just seems to me like this was one of the GB comic books, then there is the RGB episode “Flipside.” I dunno.

That is some pretty good advice I will keep that in mind thanks!

good script… great job man!!!

I liked it. It was interesting.