you got it mal.

here's the rest of that scene

Pt. 2 of the scene
Dana is silent for a moment as the four men stare at her.
“Where is Peter?” she asks, trying to remain collected. The four men turn their eyes away from her to glance at the trap.
“He’s in there, Dana,” Louis breaks the silence, pointing to the trap. The three men glare at him in unison.
Dana drops her bag and runs to the table, “Is there anything you can do?”
“Unfortunately, the only thing not mentioned yet was the option to place him in the containment unit, then reopen it and let him go,” Egon tells her. At this point, Carlos walks in. “If we attempt this, however, we will need to open a portal between our world and that of the containment unit. With all of the spiritual forces that we have collected in the past 16 years, the force traveling through the portal could cause an inter-dimensional rip which would release Hell onto Earth. To put it basically (motioning to Louis), Hades would turn New York into his backyard.” Carlos stands at the doorway with a look of extreme discomfort on his face.
“I like you guys a lot better on TV.”
Winston looks up with an annoyed look on, “Who the hell is this?”
Dana is about to answer, and is quickly cut off, “Who am I? Who am I?! Who are you, man, and why do you think you can talk to me like that? I know my history, and you aren’t one of the originals. Hell, you aren’t even a scientist. I might as well have taken your spot.” Winston is astonished at the new trash talker in the firehouse.
“Yes, and you might as well have ended up in here,” Egon answers, holding up the trap.
“Oh, shit, he’s really in there?”
“Yes he is, now may I ask why you’re here?” Ray says, anxious to move on to a different subject. A distant car horn is heard.
“Oh, well speak of the devil, that’s why I’m here,” Carlos answers, pointing in the direction of his cab. Ray and Egon glance at each other.

Next, the guys are down in the garage examining the cab.
“So, it just sprung to life?” asks Ray.
“Yea, that about covers it,” states Carlos. Egon whips out his PKE meter. It begins wildly beeping and lighting up. His eyebrows go up.
“You said it happened right before you saw her? And Dana, you said the cab came right after you got off the phone?” Egon asks them both.
“Yes,” both reply in unison.
“Hm. Ray, come here,” Egon nods to Ray. When Ray reaches him, Egon says, “I think Peter’s spirit may have possessed this cab.”
“Whoa, whoa, whoa. You said there was no way, in or out of hell, that we could do that,” Winston bursts out.
“We didn’t do it, but somehow it happened,” Egon reassures him.
“Pre-extinguishing telekinetic release? Is that what you’re thinking?” Ray asks Egon.
“Precisely.”
“Well, it’s not unheard of…” Ray begins.
It is to me. What the hell does that mean, and why is my cab driving for me?” Carlos yells in anger.
“It is when the spirit, or telekinetic energy, of a being is released from the body preceding that body’s death. Almost like a near-death experience, yet lasting forever,” Egon explains. “Peter’s goal in life was to be there for Dana, so naturally when she needed a cab, he was there. Honk twice for yes.” The car horn beeps twice.

hope you guys like how its turning out. this is a pretty key scene i think, so i would really love some improvements if you can give them. or any comments at all would help improve it.

Only thing I can suggest is maybe keep Egon's workind a bit more clinical, such as favouring ‘Taxi’ over ‘Cab’, but apart from that, pretty interesting development

that's a good point, instead of cab ill change it to taxi, or vehicle maybe. thanks kingpin

alright, this is the end of that long scene in the firehouse.

Pt. 3 of the scene
At this point, Janine strolls over. “Guys, the phones have been ringing off the hook. It’s almost too much for one person to handle,” she stresses.
“Really?” Ray perks up, “We have a job?”
“Yes, a job,” Janine answers. “The other calls were people who heard about what happened to Peter and said that they would call the Better Busters next time. And there was one guy who wanted cockroach removal, I said you’d get back to him.” (too much of a reference to the first?)
“You heard her, guys. Let’s get going!” Louis attempts to rev the group up.
As the three men sluggishly walk to the lockers to throw their jumpsuits on, Carlos and Dana are left standing by the cab. Louis runs over to Ecto-1 and tries to start it. The cadilac sputters and dies. The taxi cab trunk pops open instantly and the horn beeps a few times.
“Well,” says Ray to Carlos, “Looks like you’ve been chosen as our ride. What’s your name?”
“Carlos Vargalos.” They shake hands.
“Well Carlos,” Ray offers him the Ecto-goggles, “How would you like to come along on this bust?”
“You gunna pay for the cab fare?” asks Carlos. He and Ray are standing in front of the cab. Suddenly, the lights go on and the engine revs up. The cab edges forward and bumps Carlos’ leg.
“Whoa, calm down Pete. You would have said the exact same thing.” Ray tell the cab. The horn honks twice. “Anyway, yes Carlos, we will pay for the Cab fare.”
“Alright then, I’m there!” Carlos takes the goggles. Ray smiles wide, shakes Carlos’ hand and puts his arm around him in congratulations. “Is this the ghost trap?” asks Carlos.
“Hah, we’ve got a lot to teach you,” Ray chuckles.
“I don’t know about you,” Winston buts in, from inside the cab, “but I’ve never had a ghost wait for me to bust it. Ahem, Ray,” the cab honks twice.
“Alright, let’s go!” Ray exclaims. They all pack into the car. “Take us there, Venkman. The doors slam shut. The Five Ghostbusters stare nervously at each other. All of a sudden, the cab screeches out of the firehouse. It bursts into mid-day traffic. Dana is left with a perplexed look on her face. Janine walks up to her.
“Don’t worry honey, you’ll get through this. I wish I could tell you I know how hard this is, but I don’t think either of us knows exactly what just happened,” Janine tries to smile.

a new ghostbuster? it depends on the feedback, as im basically writing as i post. so we'll see how this goes, with you guys, and move in whatever direction from there

Good ideas venky.

I just wondered whether you are writing the script as you go or whether you have done a synopsis. I always start my scripts very basic and create the backbone of my story, then write out the scenes in more and more detail.

I do have a suggestion. Instead of them getting into a cab, I think it should be a crowded bus. I think it's a better situation for comedy and gives the chance for more interaction with other characters. The Ghostbusters will look far more out of place paying for a bus ticket. My script has a scene similar to this.

i do have a very basic idea of how i want the story to progress, but it is literally stripped down to a beginning, middle, and end. no detail

and you're right, the bus would probably be a funnier addition. but with the involvement i already have with carlos and him being a cab driver, and then peter possessing it, i think its more realistic for the story i have written to include a taxi. but id love to see how you approached the idea yourself.

One of the things that happen in my script idea is that two interns join Ghostbusters. Though they are only supposed to be there for answering calls etc. One of them is disobeidient. On their first night a call comes in. Tony, who is the angry bossy, fiery character takes the call and without permission goes to the scene, forcing Micky (a nervous character with athsma, who lacks confidince) with him.

anyway they sneak out, head to toe in ghostcatching equipment and embaressingly enough have to catch the bus where everyone is looking at them in wonder.

this scene takes us to the ghostcatching scene.

Theres alot more but I only want to post it when I am completely satisfied with it. if you want to read my initial ideas they are in the thread named “Ghostbusters 3 - An idea”.

There is also a neat twist at the end of the movie.

i dont mean to insult you in anyway, but that scene sounds very similar to louis going out on his own having to catch the bus in gb2. im assuming you will make a smart decision and not put slimer in as the driver. but im kinda in a lot of suspense about this surprise at the end. hurry up and finish it! i cant wait

I would compare it to the scene in the first movie when they walk into She sedgewick Hotel for the first time rather than the scene where Luis gets on the bus in the second movie because it is supposed to show the peoples reaction to the appearance of the characters and how out of place they look but this scene shows them actually on the bus. (I may make it a subway train).

Slimer is in my script but the character is more of a carry on from the first movie. He is evil, mean and ugly and appears several times in my idea. I think the character is far too iconic to the francise to leave out. He now appears as the ghost that they can no longer catch. He seems to now outwhit them every time. He has got smart since his being trapped and let loose and now goes from resturant to resturant in the city in search of food.

I have left out Dana Barratt and Luis Tully basically because i don't think that there is any reason for these characters to continue. I have introduced two new Ghostbusters, a new secretary and a villain and i think that if I did leave dana and Luis in there, then there would be too many characters in the movie and the script would suffer. I think its better to have fewer characters which are more meaningfull to the movie than more less meaningfull characters.

i do understand how it could get confusing with so many characters, im having a tough time fitting lines in for louis in my story. but i cant imagine them leaving altogether. id love to see it tho