Nice, but still Slimer is a little too RGB-ish.

Great wheres the rest

okay the bottom line is. i was posting these withou an ending written. so inorder to make the ending i'm working on now work, i gotta add something to that last scene, or section, or whatever……here:

Scene - IV - Winston in his car.

Winston - Oh no………. (he swerves back around and heads toward the fire house. he can see it coming up with those rays shooting out the top. then he sees Louis, Janine, Dana, and Oscar running towards him. he slams the breaks. Right next to them a commercial is being filmed. It’s for staypuft marshmallows. A man in a mm suit takes of his head (mm head that is.) and reveals that he’s none other than, walter (walter right?)Peck!)

Peck – YOU ?!?! I knew you would mess up again !?!? It’s your fault I’m stuck with this lousy job !?!?

Winston – I don’t have time to talk Pecky. Janine, did what I think happened, just happen?

Janine – Yes!?!? someone shut off the protection grid!

Winston - Great, just great. well I gotta head back.

Louis - I'll come too.

Janine - Louis?

Louis - hey I'm a Ghostbusters too, and if the guys have a problem it's my problem too.

Dana - The guys! They're still back at my apartment. (camera zooms in on Dana's frightened face)
Winston - let's roll.

peck - wait your'e not getting away!?!
(he's about to grab onto the ecto when winston blasts the alarms.)
ahhhhh!?!?i'll get you for this!??!

——okay that should set the rest straight. oh and JF sorry about the slimer rgb thing. i just liked him in the cartoon. my only problem is i have yet to have slimer have an encounter with louis. whoops…

-thespud

heres more:

Scene - VI - The Firehouse

Winston - grab a pack,Tully. You know how to work these things?

Louis - of course, I only saved the day back 92', and- (suddenly a something is heard behind a desk Louis opens fire) Aaaah!

Winston – whoa! (Louis stops.) hold it there shorty. (from behind the torched desk rises Oscar.)

Oscar - uh Mr. zeddmore….

Winston - Oscar? Does you're mother know you're here?

Oscar - what's going on?

Winston - long story short: We're the ghost busters.

Oscar - oh yeah, my mom old me about you.

Winston - anyway, we saved the world a few times and now we're in deep trouble. you know those beams shooting out the roof? that's what used to be a bunch of spooks that were in storage.

Oscar - used to be?

Winston - yeah in a few minutes they'll be all over town. you know how to work a proton pack?

Oscar - no……a what?

Winston - well it's time you learned.

Scene VII - riding in the ecto - mobile

Egon - Raymond, how many ghosts did we catch back there?

Ray - two…… why?

Egon - well according to this book, Oscar set three loose. There's still one out there.

Peter - well, it shouldn't be too hard to find, I mean only, what? one thousand(!) ghosts were set loose just a few moments ago! it be like picking a needle in a haystack!

Slimer - petewr.

Peter - slimer? what did you see the ghost?

Slimer - a huh.

Ray - well what did he look like?

Slimer - (morphs into the ghost. Sorry JF this is kinda goin even cartoonier, but it’d be a cool effect in a movie…….)

Peter – Great! Stantz! toss me a Twinkie and let's go ghost hunting! (camera pulls out of the ecto - mobile and we watch it ride away.)

Scene VIII ? - The Firehouse

Winston - c'mon guys blast ‘em

Louis - uh…. (he closes his eyes and aimlessly shoots. and to his amazement, he has a ghost locked on with his proton gun.) I need a trap, quick!

Oscar - here, Louis. (Oscar tosses a trap, which he opens right away, and captures Peter’s desk. I think that’s what would happen…)oops!

Winston - we need another one! (Winston is struggling while holding two ghosts with one beam)

Louis - Oscar hurry!

Oscar - I'll try ( he grabs another trap tosses it out and it traps one of Winston two ghosts.)
Winston – good Oscar, but we are in over our heads.I can barley get one and there are dozens! we need the guys.

————still more…comments? i gotta get offline for a little, but i'll be back on later, so don't worry if you want more.
-thespud

Better! I love this!!

i like it i like it
more more more!!!

here ya go:

Peter - Here we come to save the day!

Ray - hang on guys! (He tosses out a trap. and catches Louis's ghost.)

Winston - Where's Eggy and slimer?

Ray - they went down to the containment area!

Winston - (snatches a ghost) now this is what I call ghost bustin'!

Oscar - now with actually a ghost, locked on with his beam.) Hey, Mr. Venkman!

Peter - Oscar? Awwww…. Ray, he's finally growing up.

Ray - Be quiet Venkman, and get me a trap!

Peter - get your own trap. (ray struggles)

Ray - Pete!

Peter - just kidding, geez mellow out.

Scene VIIIII ? The containment area.

Egon - I've gotta get this thing repaired, (frustrated) there's no time. (suddenly the blue ghost appears)

Slimer - Eegon!

Egon - I see him. slimer get a trap ready. (from behind the blue ghost comes the original red and green ghosts.) But we just- oh I knew I shouldn't of left Venkman in charge of the traps!

(suddenly the three ghosts form together into one giant ghost monster. and goes through the wall of the fire house, leaving a giant hole.)

Egon - great! Slimer! Get the others! (slimer zooms up the stairs and right into peter!)

Peter - Slimer! Spud, I'm gonna kill you!

Ray - uh, Pete, he's already dead.

Slimer - Eegon!!

Winston - Let's get down there. Louis Oscar, cover us.

Louis and Oscar - (look at each other) uh…..okay. yeah sure…

Scene VIIIIII - The cu area.

Egon - we're in some big trouble,

Ray - how big?

Egon -(points to the gigantic hole) that big.

——–there is still a little more. but not much, i'm kinda still writing the ending….so…comments?

other people might yell at me for saying this, but the last two posts seem a little rushed. “Slow down, Chew your food.” Go into a little more detail describing the busting.

yeah i see what ya mean. it's more of a story than a script, i guess…er somthing like that.i'll try to add some more details in the bustin' scenes in the future. i mean they are some of the best parts! uh….anybody want more? cause i've still got some.

-thespud

Yeah keep it coming man.